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Exercise 4 - Writing specific details in body paragraphs



Instructions: The following paragraph has problems with vague language. The vague phrases are highlighted. Click on the EDIT PARAGRAPH button and make the necessary changes in the box provided to make the vague sentences more specific. When finished, click on the DONE button to compare WHAT YOU WROTE with WHAT WE WROTE. Click on the HINT button for information on how to improve the sentences.

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     Our country has been experiencing problems with its youth. If young people were required to serve in the military, they would stay out of trouble and learn good skills that they will use throughout their lives. My friend who served in the military for four years told me that military service helped him a lot and taught him many things. Mandatory military service would not only teach America's young people the meaning of respect and obligation but it would also provide them with the self-discipline they lack.
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