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Exercise 9 - Correcting bad concluding sentences in body paragraphs



Instructions: Read the paragraph and type an appropriate concluding sentence in the box.

      Neither the teenage offender nor society benefits when teenagers are sentenced to serve time in adult prisons. A 1996 Florida study found that juveniles tried in adult courts were three times more likely to reoffend than those sent to the juvenile justice system. Of those who committed new crimes, juveniles tried as adults reoffended at twice the rate of those tried in juvenile courts, and a higher percentage were rearrested for felony offenses. In addition to transforming young, inexperienced offenders into professional criminals, adult prisons expose teenagers to extremely dangerous conditions. Youth in Florida prisons are five times more likely to be raped, twice as likely to be beaten by staff, and 50% more likely to be attacked with a weapon than those sent to juvenile facilities. Furthermore, a Justice Department study showed that the suicide rate of youth in adult jails is seven times higher than that of youth in juvenile detention centers. Juveniles serving terms in adult facilities needlessly suffer abuse. In addition, after being released, they end up committing more crimes than those who are dealt with through the juvenile justice system. Society should be kind toward young offenders and try them not as adults, but as juveniles.

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Write your concluding sentence here
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